It was difficult to write a character losing his sanity to an alien hell-bent on world domination. Zack was injected with the cells of an alien, Jenova, and she’s trying to take control of him in this moment of weakness.
Also, this is more of a dungeon than a jail so it’s pitch-black to add to the psychological torture. In this snippet, Hojo (a mad scientist) put Zack and Cloud into solitary confinement because they tried to escape from the lab. Not sure if I’ll go back to the last one. It’s been a few weeks since I last posted so I thought I would start over with a new excerpt from the same story. If you would like to participate, here is the link: A bunch of writers share 8 sentences from a story they are writing or have written. This weekend I’m participating in a blog hop known as Weekend Writing Warriors. But it’s fun, so hopefully I’ll still have the time 🙂 I just got a job so I’m not too sure how much longer I will be doing this. Despite having no memory of this man, he knew him, and could not imagine a world in which he did not exist. Zack sat on the edge of his bed, watching the man across from him, thrashing and moaning, as if he were running away from something horrific in his dream. Hell was not a place of fire and brimstone, but a void with nothing but sorrow, a place so empty he could hear the echo of his thoughts. He was no longer in solitary confinement, but in another sort of prison alongside a companion, a simple luxury he now appreciated. The room reeked of sweat and urine, which permeated the air and the walls surrounding them, as if the foundation of the building were terror itself. Metal bars stood defiantly at the front of the cell, and across from him was a man sleeping on a flimsy cot with a blanket thin as a sheet. For a second he thought he had died, and the yellow-tinged light was guiding him towards the Lifestream, but a sharp, throbbing headache brought him crashing back to reality. Zack awoke to a blinding light overhead, burning his eyes. If you would like to participate, here is the link: This snippet is a continuation of last week’s where Zack develops amnesia after the alien, Jenova, takes over his brain. It’s pretty short so I could italicize it, but some people hate that -_- Any advice on this issue would be appreciated 😀 This is something that came up in another short story I wrote, and I used some advice I had read online, start with “he had cooked,” and transitioned into “he cooked.” But I got a few people commenting that was awkward too, so I don’t even know XD I just left it past tense here. If one were being grammatically correct they would add “had” to each verb because the story is already written in past tense, but it sounds so awkward like that. I struggled with the tense here because she was kind of having a memory/flashback. What happens after Nibelheim’s destruction changes their lives forever. Tifa and Cloud both come from the same village and were childhood friends. I just wrote this today (technically it’s a revision) so it isn’t as polished as last week’s :$ If you have been following along you may have made the connection that this is the same event I wrote about earlier from Zack’s point of view. As she wound up to deliver a roundhouse kick, his sword sliced into her flesh like she was made of butter, and she crumpled to the floor. Perhaps she was a fool to think a mere mortal with a mastery of martial arts could take on a demi-god, but she just saw a little girl burnt beyond the point of recognition, and she wasn’t about to let him get away with it. He turned around and smirked, his eyes as cold as a Nibelheim winter, the spark of humanity long extinguished. She followed him into the mako reactor, her feet clunking across the steel floor. She hadn’t had a good night’s sleep since the day Sepiroth destroyed her village, Nibelheim.īarely escaping the inferno, she chased after him, legs moving so fast it felt like she was flying amidst the ruins. In those few seconds before falling asleep she was defenseless against the monsters of her past, which feasted on her fear and gnawed away at her sanity.
It was about Tifa and Cloud going through their morning routine, but it’s anything but normal. This snippet takes place after last week’s snippet.
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